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Time:04:07 pm
The Ugly Speed

Here's the worst of it:
I move away
at the ugly speed of boiling,
through my last words
scratched in wood.
all the rats are on the table now.

I'd like to think I am Charlemagne
on heroic horseback conquering
but all I can claim for my own
is the space abandoned behind me
nothing before me is mine

Beneath and between
and taken from the sun.
here's the worst of it:
all I own is the emptiness of running
scratching, clutching and dropping
with ugly speed
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canohye
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Time:2006-04-21 09:48 am (UTC)
"on heroic horseback conquering"

oo-oo-ooh, bad poetry. WARNING

You have the poet's feeling for the heart-speed of language, but obviously not the emotional depth to make of speech mind-speech
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kingcadillac
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Time:2006-04-21 04:13 pm (UTC)
And I will consider that critique with as much seriousness as is usually given to people who know nothing about me. Thanks for playing.
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